Becca

What a help to have a simple outline like this to reference and help organize your story! I think one thing that could help is dividing this story into at least three parts: what is the “normal” for Obadiah and Ahab, first as kids and then as adults? What is the “new world” they’re placed … Read more

Gwen

A few chapters ago I realized this story is about a lifetime friendship between two leaders in the same kingdom who operate from different value systems. Do these notes below show their friendship? Yes, I think you do a great job of showing Obadiah’s friendship with Ahab. Obadiah rejects the values of Moloch and Asherah. … Read more

Sherry

A few chapters ago I realized this story is about a lifetime friendship between two leaders in the same kingdom who operate from different value systems. Do these notes below show their friendship? This is a good plot line, but looking on 1. Barebones, there are a lot of chapters that focus on just Obadiah … Read more

Questions of Change

Elizabeth THE STRENGTH OF A SYMMETRICAL PLOT Since a story is always at its crux, about change, I encourage you to ask yourself (and hopefully you don’t mind reporting back to me) these questions: 1. What needs to change for my main character (MC) at the beginning? (I know this is a true story, but I … Read more

Chapter Summaries

SUB Obadiah – chapter ?? – H – ?,??? words 1. Wrath: Eight-year-old Ahab and Obadiah bloody each other’s noses. 2. Race: A Syrian arrow cuts short their horse race. 3. Additions: Biah gets another job and Ahab another wife. 4. Shemer’s Hill: While Obadiah hires managers, he argues values with Ahab. 5. Home: When … Read more

Titles

Choose the Perfect Title Twilight of the Gods – Götterdämmerung The Twilight of Friends Twilight of  the Friends You Can Trust the King’s Right-hand Man Best Buds with the King The King’s Right-hand Man Friend of the King. Enemy of the Queen Royal Frenemy A friend loves at all times Grass to Save the Horses

Timeline

Timeline (of sorts) Omri 12 yrs. 6 in Tirzah1 0. 895 BC Prologue: Ahab and Obadiah cheer the troops. 1. 895 BC Wrath: They bloody each other’s noses. 2. 883 BC Race: A Syrian arrow cuts short a horse race. [Omri starts 6 yrs in Tirzah] 3. 877 BC Jezebel: Biah another job and Ahab … Read more

Obadiah Blurbs

“While Jezebel was killing the Lord’s bubblers, Obadiah hid fifty in one cave and fifty in another.” 1 Kings 18:4 The king’s right-hand man rode a chariot with six bodyguards, for he ran the royal business. Yet he risked his life to rescue fugitives from the queen. How long would he survive?  I’m excited about this! Am I wrong, or was the … Read more